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Like the moon that parts the clouds every night
She comes to me again
The one that haunts my mind
The one I cannot find

With a voice like glass
and tasseled hair
With eyes that are longing
and sing of despair

The mists clear
The ravens cry
My heart erodes
and she is here

Whispering lullabies that leave me speechless.
Whole.
Running her hands across my cheek
fragile, so pale.

Our loves are one
ours souls are free

She disappears
Never to be
©2008-2010 ~tenks62
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Author's Comments

I felt lamented last night, and today I woke up feeling much the same.
I'd have to say, this feeling makes me feel more at easy with myself, as if I'm who I've always felt I was...

Anyways, when I feel like this artwork and poetry come a lot easier to me. In 4th block today, we had nothing in particular that we had to do, so I took out a piece of paper and jotted down a line that I heard in my head last night, "...and tasseled. With eyes that are longing, and sing of despair."
And even though the class was very loud and unforgiving, I was able to build a poem around it.

It really pisses me off though because it was just me spilling thoughts onto a paper and I didn't follow any kind of real rhyming scheme.



Either way, I hope someone reads it an at least can give me a comment or two on it. You know me, big comment whore.

Oh... and is the poem about someone? Not really. Is it about loving a ghost? Not at all, that'd be just plain weird. If you really care to know what it was about... just ask.

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:iconsilentillusion:
I like it much better without the rigid rhyming, honestly. When I read a poem that rhymes, I get too caught up in hearing the two rhyming words that I forget what the point of the poem is. But not with this poem, so don't worry.

If it's not about someone, or a ghost (not that I figured that one :o), I'd imagine it's about something intangible, like a state of feeling or an inspiration. I don't know. I'm working on getting my coffee in, I'll make more sense later.

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:icontenks62:
Please do. :]

And the ghost was just because I'm feeling random today.

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:icontenks62:
Oi!

Thank you!

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I use antlers in all of my decorating!
:iconnetdragon130:
I love it. ^_^
I like how you start strong and resolve with a 'feather line'.

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The lightest brush against your cheek
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:icontenks62:
Thanks neilion.
I'm pretty sure that it was a product of strong emotion in the beginning, but at the end it was more of a feeling that it really needs to get done. haha

Thanks for the fave too!
Glad that you truly like it.

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